Castle In The Distance
Bridge.
There was this old bridge, It was so beautiful, it had
moss all over it, it was really stable, and there was a lot of
colorful bricks. What an amazing bridge I thought to myself.
While I was walking over it was very stable and flat.
moss all over it, it was really stable, and there was a lot of
colorful bricks. What an amazing bridge I thought to myself.
While I was walking over it was very stable and flat.
Castle.
While I was walking over this old bridge I saw this
very tall creaky castle, It had a sign that had missing
letters, I think it meant to say NO TRESPASSING. It was
mysterious and mystique. When I walked close up to it. It felt
abandoned, “I wonder if there was an after life that’s still there.”
I said to myself. The door was opened and millions of rats
just came scooting past me. “I hate rats!” I said loudly.
Having rats scooting past me felt like I was surrounded by
rotten eggs. They smelt horrible. And I was thinking what could
be there. I had no doubt but the castle looked haunted.
very tall creaky castle, It had a sign that had missing
letters, I think it meant to say NO TRESPASSING. It was
mysterious and mystique. When I walked close up to it. It felt
abandoned, “I wonder if there was an after life that’s still there.”
I said to myself. The door was opened and millions of rats
just came scooting past me. “I hate rats!” I said loudly.
Having rats scooting past me felt like I was surrounded by
rotten eggs. They smelt horrible. And I was thinking what could
be there. I had no doubt but the castle looked haunted.
Ocean.
I came out of the castle and saw this beautiful ocean.
I couldn't believe what I was seeing. I felt like I was in heaven.
The view looked unbelievable. The ocean looked majestic,
transparent and calm but looked very cold. It was a green and
blue ocean. I could see all the beautiful sea creatures.
"How cool is that?" I said to myself.
I couldn't believe what I was seeing. I felt like I was in heaven.
The view looked unbelievable. The ocean looked majestic,
transparent and calm but looked very cold. It was a green and
blue ocean. I could see all the beautiful sea creatures.
"How cool is that?" I said to myself.
Distance
There was this unknown
land that looked like it wasn’t claimed yet
. The trees looked well grown on that land.
I saw a few animals jumping around like kangaroos.
I really wanted to play with them but I didn't want to swim in
the cold water.
land that looked like it wasn’t claimed yet
. The trees looked well grown on that land.
I saw a few animals jumping around like kangaroos.
I really wanted to play with them but I didn't want to swim in
the cold water.
By Rautaki
Kia ora, Rautaki I like the way you used descriptive words about the subjects. next time you might want to add a description on the top or bottom of your piece of writing.Good work Rautaki It's brilliant from Rhodes.
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